Monday, November 22, 2010

Taking Joy In His Agony (chp 23)

HA HA HA! Tonight I have taken the life of Elizabeth Clerval! My plan is working so well! After killing her I stayed to watch the reaction of my creator and he was devastated! He took all the precautions he THOUGHT would be necessary, but of course he was wrong! I waited until she was left alone while he wondered about the other room searching for any sign of ME! I then sprung on the beast's mate and seized her by the neck! I squeezed and squeezed until I felt all the life leave from her body! My creator heard her screams, but was too late! I sprang the window and awaited to see his reaction! I enjoyed the agony expressed on his face! The face that usually showed fear and anxiety was now filled with melancholy and despair! It purely satisfying! I laughed in his face and his took a shot at me, but missed! His shot awoken the rest of the cottagers, but I was long gone by then!

2 comments:

  1. You inhabit the character of the monster easily. You did a great job of describing the monster's reaction to his crimes committed against his creator. You showed no pain or remorse whatsoever at the pain that Frankenstein felt as a result of all your crimes. You have done a great job in becoming the monster.

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  2. I like this post because it shows feeling and uses bunch of excalmation marks showing his enthusiasm. I only saw a few errors at the end though with grammer, like "It purely satisfying" "I laughed in his face as his took a shot at me" and ya just little mistakes. I gotta show some critisism you know. Might get my grade low or something.

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